Flash Fiction

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One of my closest blogging buddies is Joy from http://pricelessjoy.co I love her blog because the posts are always unique and enjoyable. She has just started a Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. https://flashfictionforaspiringwriters.wordpress.com And her first challenge is to write 150/175 words using this photo prompt

Through the Window

“Just pretend you’re admiring the building, or something.”

Polly cautiously looks up, still disbelieving what Toby had told her earlier. “I don’t see anything.”

“It’s the third window from the right, the one with the blind propped up.”

Polly squints, trying hard to see. More than anything, she wants to believe, the alternative is much too scary. Dr Dhar did say it might start with this type of behaviour.

“I… erm… might see something,” Poly says hesitantly. “But, how do you know he’s watching you? It might not even be a man, maybe it’s just a nosy old woman.”

“But, the same thing happens every time I walk past… it’s too much of a coincidence…”

Polly almost squeals with relief when she finally catches sight of someone peering through the blinds.

“And according to the young lady in the book shop,” Toby continues, “No one has had access to the top floor in over five years.

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46 thoughts on “Flash Fiction”

myspokenheart February 19, 2015 at 19:06

Well now I want to know what happens next…

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1. Cat Post authorFebruary 19, 2015 at 19:17
  
  So do I 😉
  
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kat February 19, 2015 at 19:18

wow what a great teaser!

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1. Cat Post authorFebruary 19, 2015 at 19:19
  
  Thank you, Kat
  
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Priceless Joy February 19, 2015 at 19:41

Okay, this means you need to write a book so we can get off the edge of our seats!! LOL! I loved this Cat. I think your writing is wonderful and I am not kidding about that book!!

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1. Cat Post authorFebruary 19, 2015 at 19:55
  
  Thank you, Joy, you’re too kind
  
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  1. Priceless Joy February 19, 2015 at 19:56
    
    Really, I am serious! Are you going to link it with InLinkz? I hope you do.
    
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2. Cat Post authorFebruary 19, 2015 at 19:58
  
  I just added it to blue froggy thing…. don’t panic, it worked this time, thank you for your patience 😉
  
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  1. Priceless Joy February 19, 2015 at 20:01
    
    I knew you would do it just fine!!
    
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    1. Cat Post authorFebruary 19, 2015 at 20:35
      
      Now I understand why you needed the the blue froggy… I was able to read everyone else’s stories. great challenge, Joy…Good job!
      
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      1. Priceless Joy February 19, 2015 at 20:58
        
        Thank you Cat! I am elated that I got through yesterday. Today has been a dream!
        
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      2. Priceless Joy February 19, 2015 at 21:44
        
        I just mailed you a picture of Bria. It wasn’t very good but it was the best I could get of her today. She wasn’t particularly wanting to cooperate. I’m glad you understand the purpose of the blue froggy now. You were probably thinking, “why bother having a button on your blog?” Cat, if I was harsh with you yesterday I hope you will forgive me. I was in major anxiety yesterday. I had to quit some things that I felt really bad quitting, so I was also dealing with that guilt. Regarding the Flash Fiction Chain I am in, yesterday came up being my day to write part 15 of the story we are working on and I simply couldn’t do it and had to dump it off on another participants lap. I was feeling terrible over that. Of all days in the whole month and it had to be yesterday!
        
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        Cat Post authorFebruary 20, 2015 at 08:31
        
        Bria’s gorgeous, thanks for the pic. I’m so glad everything worked out…. in the end 😉
        
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        Priceless Joy February 20, 2015 at 13:44
        
        Thank you Cat. As you can see, I do not do well under stress anymore. Thanks for being my friend and understanding.
        
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        Cat Post authorFebruary 20, 2015 at 16:14
        
        I would have been the same…no, by now, my PC would be out the window 😉 Nevertheless, it all went very well, Joy and I may have a couple of pics if you want to use them in the future. Always your understanding friend
        
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        Priceless Joy February 20, 2015 at 16:17
        
        Yes, I would love some of your photos for future prompts!
        
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      3. Priceless Joy February 20, 2015 at 20:22
        
        I forgot to invite you back for next week. Thank you for participating and I hope you will continue. 🙂
        
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        Cat Post authorFebruary 20, 2015 at 20:47
        
        Of course I will
        
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        Priceless Joy February 20, 2015 at 20:53
        
        😀
        
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John Yeo February 19, 2015 at 20:18

Great scary write paranoia or ghosts? ~ i enjoyed the suspense ~ Well done Cat 🙂

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1. Cat Post authorFebruary 19, 2015 at 20:36
  
  Thank you, John
  
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Sonya February 19, 2015 at 20:42

I like how you use dialogue for characterisation and to move the story on. It’s a bit ominous, I’d be worried if I were Polly, too. Good job!

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1. Cat Post authorFebruary 19, 2015 at 20:45
  
  Nice one, glad you liked it, thank you
  
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M February 19, 2015 at 21:49

Oohh I like it!

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1. Cat Post authorFebruary 20, 2015 at 08:18
  
  Thank you, M 😉
  
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mandy smith February 20, 2015 at 02:15

Something different, Cat! I love it. Isn’t it fun to go in a different direction with your writing? I think you should continue doing this–you’ve got a real knack! I love mystery–and you’ve got it 😀

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1. Cat Post authorFebruary 20, 2015 at 08:17
  
  Thank you, Mandy, it’s something different to think of each week
  
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  1. mandy smith February 22, 2015 at 23:44
    
    Is it a certain day a week, Cat? I don’t want to miss the next episode!
    
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    1. Cat Post authorFebruary 23, 2015 at 13:51
      
      Thanks, glad you enjoyed it, Mandy. It’s every weds but a different prompt each week
      
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Tracesofthesoul February 20, 2015 at 07:03

Oh I love this!! there needs to be a sequel!! great write:)

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1. Cat Post authorFebruary 20, 2015 at 08:16
  
  Thank you 😉
  
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Glynis Jolly February 20, 2015 at 14:30

You aren’t just an aspiring writer, you are one, just not published yet. Your story had me looking at the photo more closely.

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1. Cat Post authorFebruary 20, 2015 at 16:12
  
  Thank you, Glynis that is nice of you to say, but of course, I put myself down more than you could imagine and consider my amateur abilities to be slightly below average. I thought a good way to test the water would be to write some prompts like this one and judge the response. I will always be open to constructive criticism because that can only help potential improvements take hold a lot quicker. Trouble is, none of us wants to hurt feelings… but, please, all types of feedback are welcome, I will respect that very much. 😉
  
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penshift February 21, 2015 at 03:26

Nicely written. I going to hazard a guess… Schizophrenia? And it always a relief to discover their paranoia isn’t as paranoid as it seems! lol

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1. Cat Post authorFebruary 21, 2015 at 09:38
  
  I don’t really know, I was maybe thinking something more serious like a brain tumour! Nothing like a bit of cheeriness!
  
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  1. penshift February 21, 2015 at 11:27
    
    Ah, that would be a very specific symptom for tumor but common in aggressive tumors. Talk about a red herring.
    
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summerstommy2 February 21, 2015 at 03:54

Hi Cat, I do love a story with a air of mystery about it. Well done. Michael.

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1. Cat Post authorFebruary 21, 2015 at 09:38
  
  Thank you, Michael, appreciated
  
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married2arod February 21, 2015 at 04:37

lol I thought this story was so much fun. They’re just as bad as the snoopy lady or man that lives in that building. The relationship between the two were definitely believable. It was this little game they were playing that really held my attention. If you wanted to be nit-picky you could tighten the dialogue and give yourself a couple of more words to add in setting or character descriptions. Overall well done.

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1. Cat Post authorFebruary 21, 2015 at 10:04
  
  Yes, I also thought they were just as nosy. I did think about having more of character descriptions after I submitted, but great feedback, thank you very much
  
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Ellespeth February 21, 2015 at 05:26

Oh no! This prompt has brought forth some scary stories…yours is one of those! These two seem to walking that thin line of sanity.
Ellespeth

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1. Cat Post authorFebruary 21, 2015 at 10:04
  
  Yes, it is often a thin line! Thank you for your feedback
  
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manyofus1980 February 22, 2015 at 13:09

Well done, Cat! I loved this. And Joys blog is great. I followed it. XX

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1. Cat Post authorFebruary 22, 2015 at 15:35
  
  Joy is also very nice. Thank you, Carol Anne
  
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Ameena k.g February 23, 2015 at 04:33

Ooh, the mystery! I love thrillers and this is a job well done :D. And your story was a little too convincing, i had to zoom the image just to confirm if there was indeed a shadow or not ;).

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1. Cat Post authorFebruary 23, 2015 at 14:05
  
  That’s wonderful, I wondered if anyone would enlarge the pic to have a better look. Thank you for your feedback 😉
  
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