This week’s challenge from https://flashfictionforaspiringwriters.wordpress.com is to write 150/175 words using this photo prompt.
“I don’t flippin believe it.” Shirley throws her empty can of lemonade onto the pile of rubbish in the corner of her lounge. She takes a long drag of her cigarette and exhales loudly. “It’s only 9.30_flippin_am and they’ve started a flippin tennis match already.”
Shirley had been outraged when the management proposed a tennis court to replace their plush green lawn, but few residents were willing to listen to a dotty old woman’s campaign.
William loved tennis. As his arthritic legs slowly totter towards the balcony, he glances at Shirley with the same adoration he possessed since the moment they first met, but the years had not been kind to Shirley’s temperament or her hygiene and she would chat to herself all day long, never expecting a reply.
“There is only one thing that will tear my William away from those flippin tennis balls,” Shirley says wryly as she fixed her dress and stockings. “Come on William, sugar plum,” she rattles his collar and lead, “It’s time for your walkies.”
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This is awesome!
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Thank you 😉
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Hahaha! I loved this! What a surprise ending — I was expecting that at all! I loved it. Great story Cat! Hope you keep coming back! 🙂
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Thank you, Joy 😉
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nice piece of writing.
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Thank you, Kat
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Ha, love the twist! I questioned William’s presence because Shirley comes across like a lonely old lady, which makes the ending all the better. Yes, she would definitely have a dog 🙂
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Thank you, Sonya
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I was not expecting William to be a dog! 🙂
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Thank you for reading, Andrea
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I always your stuff my dear…
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Oh my lord, Cat, that was awesome! 😀
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Thank you, Mandy 😉
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Unexpected ending, loved it! Nicely done!
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Thank you so much 😉
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lol loved it:)
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Thank you 😉
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Yet another great piece. I couldn’t decide if William was a lover-turned-quiet companion, a ghost, or a memory that Shirley could vent her troubles to. But he’s a dog! 😀 A great loving twist! I’m curious. Where to will she walk William?
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Maybe she lets him out to pee and poop on the tennis court! Thank you for your feedback 😉
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Haha!!! you GOT me there!! so cute! I`m glad I noticed your story and hurried up to write mine before reading yours:) What a sense of humour you have!
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Thank you 😉
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Loved it. 🙂
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Thank you. Hope you’re well
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LOL. You got me. I totally thought William was her husband. And oh man the hygiene line, what a great detail. Poor Shirley. I thought you hit all the parts of a good story: premise, characters, etc. There was a shift in tense. The beginning and end you had present tense and for the memory you had past tense which was fine, but when William totters, that should go back to present tense. But I loved the story, so fun!
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I knew there was something not right with that part, but was completely missing the point you raised, but hey, that’s why I went with the “aspiring” writers… for kind people like you to offer good feedback, thank you, appreciated 😉
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This was very entertaining Cat, I enjoyed the journey you took me on and the clever ending. Well done.
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Thank you, Michael
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