Flash Fiction

One of my closest blogging buddies is Joy from http://pricelessjoy.co I love her blog because the posts are always unique and enjoyable. She has just started a Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. https://flashfictionforaspiringwriters.wordpress.com And her first challenge is to write 150/175 words using this photo prompt

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Through the Window

“Just pretend you’re admiring the building, or something.”

Polly cautiously looks up, still disbelieving what Toby had told her earlier. “I don’t see anything.”

“It’s the third window from the right, the one with the blind propped up.”

Polly squints, trying hard to see. More than anything, she wants to believe, the alternative is much too scary. Dr Dhar did say it might start with this type of behaviour.

“I… erm… might see something,” Poly says hesitantly. “But, how do you know he’s watching you? It might not even be a man, maybe it’s just a nosy old woman.”

“But, the same thing happens every time I walk past… it’s too much of a coincidence…”

Polly almost squeals with relief when she finally catches sight of someone peering through the blinds.

“And according to the young lady in the book shop,” Toby continues, “No one has had access to the top floor in over five years.

160 words with title

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46 thoughts on “Flash Fiction

  1. Priceless Joy

    Okay, this means you need to write a book so we can get off the edge of our seats!! LOL! I loved this Cat. I think your writing is wonderful and I am not kidding about that book!!

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          1. Priceless Joy

            I just mailed you a picture of Bria. It wasn’t very good but it was the best I could get of her today. She wasn’t particularly wanting to cooperate. I’m glad you understand the purpose of the blue froggy now. You were probably thinking, “why bother having a button on your blog?” Cat, if I was harsh with you yesterday I hope you will forgive me. I was in major anxiety yesterday. I had to quit some things that I felt really bad quitting, so I was also dealing with that guilt. Regarding the Flash Fiction Chain I am in, yesterday came up being my day to write part 15 of the story we are working on and I simply couldn’t do it and had to dump it off on another participants lap. I was feeling terrible over that. Of all days in the whole month and it had to be yesterday!

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            1. Cat Post author

              I would have been the same…no, by now, my PC would be out the window 😉 Nevertheless, it all went very well, Joy and I may have a couple of pics if you want to use them in the future. Always your understanding friend

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  2. mandy smith

    Something different, Cat! I love it. Isn’t it fun to go in a different direction with your writing? I think you should continue doing this–you’ve got a real knack! I love mystery–and you’ve got it 😀

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    1. Cat Post author

      Thank you, Glynis that is nice of you to say, but of course, I put myself down more than you could imagine and consider my amateur abilities to be slightly below average. I thought a good way to test the water would be to write some prompts like this one and judge the response. I will always be open to constructive criticism because that can only help potential improvements take hold a lot quicker. Trouble is, none of us wants to hurt feelings… but, please, all types of feedback are welcome, I will respect that very much. 😉

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    1. Cat Post author

      I don’t really know, I was maybe thinking something more serious like a brain tumour! Nothing like a bit of cheeriness!

      Thank you for your feedback

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  3. married2arod

    lol I thought this story was so much fun. They’re just as bad as the snoopy lady or man that lives in that building. The relationship between the two were definitely believable. It was this little game they were playing that really held my attention. If you wanted to be nit-picky you could tighten the dialogue and give yourself a couple of more words to add in setting or character descriptions. Overall well done.

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    1. Cat Post author

      Yes, I also thought they were just as nosy. I did think about having more of character descriptions after I submitted, but great feedback, thank you very much

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  4. Ameena k.g

    Ooh, the mystery! I love thrillers and this is a job well done :D. And your story was a little too convincing, i had to zoom the image just to confirm if there was indeed a shadow or not ;).

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